Friday, September 06, 2019

snake poem

The poetry sisters are thinking about snakes this month, writing short poems comparing a snake to something new. Eight lines or less. Phew, that's a tough one! I don't normally like snakes, but I could right away think of a time a cute little baby garden snake surprised me on my front step. Here's my little poem -


Snake resting on my step -
a baked rock holding heat.
Neither he nor I
intending to move.
With a quick flick he’s gone;
a smooth stone slipping
across the pond.
- Andromeda Jazmon


Check out what my poetry sisters have written:

Laura
Sara
Trisha
Tanita
Liz
Rebecca
Kelly is taking a break this month, but we will see her next time!

And here's the Friday Poetry Round up at Poetry for Children. Enjoy!

11 comments:

Kimberly Hutmacher said...

Your snake poem reminded me of a time I almost picked up a curled up snake, mistaking it for my daughter's jump rope. The colors were similar. Thankfully, I figured it out before I picked it up and soon after, I got my new prescription eye glasses :)

Linda B said...

I see few snakes in town, only am surprised by them when I'm in the mountains. Love your stillness response, the waiting for what's next, and that "smooth stone slipping across the pond."

Liz Steinglass said...

I love "a baked rock." Perfect.

Alice Nine said...

I am certainly with you about not liking snakes. However, I have found that when doing a writing lesson at the sentence level in an elementary classroom, the skeleton sentence "The snake hissed." creates a lot of creative buzz.

author amok said...

I can see the images in this poem so clearly! I'm not a fan of snakes either, but D.H. Lawrence's poem "The Snake" is one of my favorites.

Liz Garton Scanlon said...

Oh, Andi!! That skipping stone! This is just lovely. Thank you!

Rebecca Holmes said...

I love the image of a snake as both quick and stone-like. It perfectly captures something about snakeness!

Carmela Martino said...

I'm not a great fan of snakes either, but I love the imagery of the last two lines. :-)

tanita✿davis said...

A baked rock holding heat -- that is PERFECT. And they will just sit still until they remember something random like they left the stove on... and off they go.

laurasalas said...

I love the unexpected comparison between the snake and the smooth stone slipping across the water. Lovely!

Sara said...

Ha! You capture that frozen moment when NOPE NOBODY'S MOVING. Be it fear, mutual admiration, laziness.... and then ZIP, the snake is braver than we are and slips away. Love it.