Friday, September 02, 2016

Clogyrnach: a Welsh poetic form

My Poetry Sisters and I are trying out a new-to-me form this month, something I have found quite tricky. I only just pulled something out that I am willing to share. I need to work on this one a bit more; it's a challenge!

Trisha had posted about the Clogyrnach form on her Monday Poetry Challenge last year, explaining it this way:

Clogyrnach is a Welsh poetic meter that falls under the poetic form of awdl (odes). Clogyrnach are composed of any number of 6-line stanzas. Each stanza has 32 syllables. The first couplet is 8 syllables with an end rhyme of aa, the second couplet is 5 syllables with an end rhyme of bb, and the final couplet is is 3 syllables with an end rhyme of ba. In some variations the poem is written as a 5-line stanza with the 5th line composed of 6 syllables.  

I had a terrible time trying to write something that didn't sound completely sing-songy at first, then awkward, and finally falling flat with cliche. Finally I started to concentrate on a sky view I had enjoyed a few days ago on my lunch walk, and my thoughts seemed to fit the form. 

Above the Valley

Puff clouds stretch out across the sky
Above the treetops, float and fly
Boats that bob and toss
Made of cotton floss
Race across
Wave goodbye
      - Andromeda Jazmon

Please go see what the other Poetry Sisters have done with this form- they are so clever!

Laura Purdie Salas
Tricia Stohr-Hunt
Sara Lewis Holmes
Kelly Fineman
Liz Garton Scanlon
Tanita S. Davis 

And don't forget to visit the Friday Poetry Roundup at A Penny and Her Jots!


Sara said...

Ah. You did it! I, too, struggled with subject matter. Honestly, I think the sky is tough to write about, but you make it seem easy-breezy here. Lovely.

Liz Garton Scanlon said...

Cotton floss -- a perfect image! I think it's positively lovely what you've come up with, Andi. Thank you for this....

Penny Parker Klostermann said...

Very nice! I'm enjoying reading the Poetry Sisters' Clogyrnachs/Clogyrnaches??

Anonymous said...

Love this, Andi - really and truly.

laurasalas said...

I can't believe we both had boats bobbing in our 32-syllable poems. What are the chances! Your poem feels so weightless and easy. Lovely.

Brenda at FriendlyFairyTales said...

Good job on a tough form.

Michelle Heidenrich Barnes said...

Beautiful, easy breezy as a summer's day should be!

Ruth said...

Lovely, and this works well with the view I'm seeing out my window right now!

Irene Latham said...

What better inspiration than the sky! But, yes, tough to be fresh and original... I like the boats bobbing! Thank you for sharing.

Mary Lee said...

If you hadn't shared your struggles with the form, readers wouldn't have known. Your poem feels effortless -- you captured the dreamy sky perfectly!

Bridget Magee said...

Your images will stick with me as I gaze at the sky - thank you! =)