Friday, November 13, 2009

Flu and Asthma poetry

Trisha, at Miss Rumphius Effect, has given us the charge in this week's Monday Poetry Stretch: try a new form called "rictameter, an unrhymed, 9-line poem with a syllable count of 2/4/6/8/10/8/6/4/2 in which the first and last lines are the same."


Swine Flu with Asthma 

Long night.
Coughing non-stop -
little guy has the flu.
No one rests, not mom, who thinks she
might be going to the ER tonight
again, with one sick little boy.
Rocking and listening
to him struggle -
long night.

-Andromeda Jazmon

Written for my own little guy who has asthma and beat the flu. He had to do a nebulizer medication treatment before we went out trick or treating on Halloween. I am also thinking of my friends with sick kids, and all of us struggling this season. God Bless us, every one.

See more rictameter poems on Trisha's blog . The Friday Poetry Roundup is hosted by Greggory K. at Gottabook. Enjoy!


Shelley said...

Awww, poor little guy! And poor tired you!

Hang in there...

tanita✿davis said...

Oh, Andi. The juxtaposition of the Superman pajamas make it worse somehow.

laurasalas said...

Tanita, yes! I thought that same thing. Glad he's done with the flu. Hope everybody can get some rest this weekend, Andi (though somehow a house with kids in it never seems restful on weekends).

Lone Star Ma said...

I'm so glad he's better.

Vasilly said...

I have a son with asthma and him getting the flu a few weeks ago was horrible.Glad to hear your son is better. God bless you guys.

Anonymous said...

I hope he is feeling better. It is the scariest thing to think that our children are at such risk.My granddughter has respiratory issues as well. Rest this weekend.

Elaine Magliaro said...


I hope your little guy feels better soon--and that you can get some rest.

Melissa said...

I have a little boy with asthma and I understand nights like that. So hard. Glad he's better! (And, echoing others--I hope you get some rest!)

Andromeda Jazmon said...

Thanks for all these kind comments. He is doing better today and back at school. The nebulizer really helps.

Scriptor Senex said...

Gflad to know he's better. Suffering on behalf of one's child is no fun, is it.
As you say, God Bless all those who are coping with sick children at the moment.

Julie said...

You must have been just out of your head with worry. So glad to hear that he is better now! Such a cutie!

Karen Edmisten said...

Poor little guy. I'm glad to hear he's doing better. One of my daughters has asthma, so I know how you feel ... the good news is that as she's gotten older, she seems to be "outgrowing" some aspects of it. Hang in there!