Friday, February 20, 2009

Sijo for Friday Poetry

Monday’s poetry stretch this week is to write a Sijo poem. Trisha explains: “Originating in Korea, sijo are poems divided into three or six lines. These poems frequently use word play in the form of metaphors, symbols and puns. Here is a description from AHApoetry.

More ancient than haiku, the Korean SIJO shares a common ancestry with haiku, tanka and similar Japanese genres. All evolved from more ancient Chinese patterns.Sijo is traditionally composed in three lines of 14-16 syllables each, totaling between 44-46 syllables. A pause breaks each line approximately in the middle; it resembles a caesura but is not based on metrics.

Here are my attempts:



Like lemon slices full of zing
to bathe my winter weary eyes;
Daffodils shout “Wake up! Stretch!
Push the heavy quilts away”!
Forced in a pot on a grocer’s shelf
They’re just a cold mid-winter tease.



Flip tail bushy paws twinkle nose trouble coming squirrel!
Some call him cute that scrabbling clawed hungry chomping gnawer!
He’s in my kitchen wall. Peanut butter & banana baits my trap.

.....-Andromeda Jazmon

If you want to try some it's not too late to join in. The Friday Poetry round up is hosted by Cuileann at The Holly and the Ivy. The hosting schedule is found in the sidebar at A Year of Reading for the next couple months. Enjoy your weekend!


susan said...

It's been awhile since I've read poems written in this form. Thanks for sharing the poem and explanation.

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Tricia said...

I practically fell off the chair when I read your squirrel poem. I could so clearly see my father baiting the traps (humane ones!) and then driving the squirrels far away.

Fine job with these!

Annie said...

I love "twinkle nose trouble coming squirel" - what a terrific image.
We used to have a squirrel who dropped by regularly to chew on our front porch.

jama said...

I like these! The squirrel one is perfect (we battle with them daily).

Janet said...

Both of these are great. We have squirrels that jump from the roof of the house onto our bird feeder. Maybe I could memorize this poem to shout at them as I let the dog out...

Kelly said...

Thank you for sharing this form. Love your daffodil poem. I'm so looking forward to spring!

tanita s. davis said...

Oh, funny, funny, that squirrel poem. Me: baiting traps, talking the squirrel into them, driving to the golf course... letting them go. Over and over and over and over...

I LOVE those daffs. Glorious pictures. Definitely if you're seeing yellow now it's a tease; I'm just seeing tiny green nubbins now. Whoo!

Color Online said...

Thanks for coming by. I remembered after posting the poem (I had it saved), that I loaned the collection out and it wasn't returned. Of course, I went immediately to Amazon to see if I could get another copy. The young poet I loaned it to loves books like I do so I don't feel too bad about her having it.

I love daffodils. I used to buy them regularly when I worked in cubby. :-)

Lone Star Ma said...

I'm afraid for your squirrels!

Elaine Magliaro said...


I really like your two sijo poems. The squirrel poem is delightful. I haven't attempted many of Tricia's Poetry Stretches lately. In fact, I haven't been writing much poetry lately. Too tired battling my second respiratory infection of 2009. I'm dying to get back to doing my daily walk again.

Maybe this post will get me cracking on my poetry again. Your poetry is always an inspiration.

Have a wonderful weekend.

Zetta Elliott said...

Greetings! I'm a bit of a haiku freak, but maybe I need to expand my repertoire...Susan suggested I contact you since I'm looking for bloggers to review my YA novel, A Wish After Midnight. I think you enjoyed my picture book, BIRD, so perhaps you'd be interested in a review copy of WISH? If so, please let me know and I'll send it to you right away...

Carol said...

Mmm, daffodils--
The poem and the photos are lovely!
Thanks for reminding us that spring is coming

Cloudscome said...

Thank you all for your kind comments! I did catch that pesky squirrel. Actually I caught him twice. The first time he figured out how to open the cage door and got away. The next day I set it again and he was foolish enough to go after the bait again. I got the doors secured better and drove him in his trap to a park over 5 miles away and let him go. Bye bye squirrel and good luck to you! :)

Elaine I hope you are feeling better by now!

Zetta I would LOVE to read your YA novel! I am going to look for your email address right now.

laurasalas said...

Oh, Andi, those first two lines of your daffodils poem are glorious!

Like lemon slices full of zing
to bathe my winter weary eyes;

I can practically feel some cold cucumber feeling on my eyelids just reading this!

Jules at 7-Imp said...

Lovely, LOVELY photos.